“The logline is truly an art form of its own. It’s the one or two sentence summary of your film that not only conveys your premise, but also gives the reader emotional insight into the story as a whole.” it should “efficiently represent the story and get the potential reader interested.” (Kroll, N, 2016) So, I want to create a logline that shows all of these features.
When looking at the Raindance website, it gives 10 tips on creating a killer logline which I am going to try and follow:
1: A logline should have the following: the protagonist, their goal, the antagonist/antagonistic force
4 daters try to traverse the tough world of Tinder
2: Tell us something interesting about the character E.g. “a sous-chef”.
4 young daters.
3: Use an adjective to give character depth.
4 young, single daters.
4: Quickly present the protagonist’s goal.
…in order to find a partner.
5: Describe the antagonist very shortly.
… the mobile dating platform
6: Make the protagonist pro-active. They should drive the story.
in order to find a partner covers this.
7: If possible, include stakes and/or a ticking time bomb. E.g. To save his reputation a secretly gay frat-boy must sleep with 15 women by the end-of-semester party.
8: Setup. E.g. In a world where all children are grown in vats…
in an increasingly technological world…
9: About the ending. Do not reveal it.
10: Don’t tell the story, sell the story. Create a desire to see the script as well as telling them what’s in it. (Raindance.org, 2013)
Which comes up with this: In an increasingly technological world, 4 young, single daters attempt to traverse the the tough world of Tinder, a mobile dating platform, in order to find a partner.
Whilst this logline seems quite good, it perhaps might be following a fiction guideline too tightly. So, I must find loglines of documentaries and see if it fits well amongst them. When looking at the filmdaily.tv website, I found a bunch of loglines for very highly rated documentaries:
America: Imagine the World Without Her: A story that questions the shaming of the US through revisionist history, lies and omissions by educational institutions, political organizations, Alinsky, Barack Obama, Hillary Clinton and other progressives to destroy America.
Catfish: Young filmmakers document their colleague’s budding online friendship with a young woman and her family which leads to an unexpected series of discoveries.
The Act of Killing: A documentary which challenges former Indonesian death-squad leaders to reenact their mass-killings in whichever cinematic genres they wish, including classic Hollywood crime scenarios and lavish musical numbers.
The Imposter: A documentary centered on a young Frenchman who claims to a grieving Texas family that he is their 16-year-old son who has been missing for 3 years. (Filmdaily.tv, 2015)
My logline looks very similar to a lot of these. They show and describe who the protagonist(s) are and the context in which they are placed. However, they tell the form also. Which is something my logline doesn’t include. Here is my revised logline:
“In an increasingly technological world, this documentary follows 4 young, single daters as they attempt to find a partner as whilst traversing through the tough world of Tinder, the mobile dating application.”
Filmdaily.tv. (2015) Top Box Office Documentary Loglines [online] available from <http://www.filmdaily.tv/documentary/top-box-office-documentary-loglines> [17 March 2016]
Kroll, N. (2016) How To Write The Perfect Logline: And Why It’s As Important As Your Screenplay [online] available from <http://www.indiewire.com/article/how-to-write-the-perfect-logline-and-why-its-as-important-as-your-screenplay> [17 March 2016]
Raindance.org. (2013) 10 Tips For Writing Loglines – Raindance [online] available from <http://www.raindance.org/10-tips-for-writing-loglines/> [17 March 2016]